We've done some changes on the script we had planned. After me and my group reviewed the script together, we were hoping to improve the overall feel of the scenes by improving pacing and making the dialogue a bit better to create a more authentic comedy.
When we were working on our project last time, we achieved several things, including the title for our film opening. The title we came up with is SHIFT HAPPENS. We choose this title because it is appropriate to the car aspect of the film, and also creates an expectation that something is going to go wrong in this movie.
Below is the new version, which shows where the project is currently at. The script might need future improvements during production but right now it demonstrates the genre of the story, the characters and the tone of SHIFT HAPPENS.
Script: SHIFT HAPPENS
BACK ALLEY – NIGHT
Paulie leans casually against his car, arms crossed. He looks calm, like he’s done this before. MR. CLUTCH walks up holding a case.
PAULIE
MR. Clutch?
MR. CLUTCH
Depends, whos asking
PAULIE
Its paul. You got the thing?
MR. CLUTCH
Mr. Clutch opens the case carefully. Inside is a rare looking performance part.
PAULIE
Its paul. You got the thing?
MR. CLUTCH
Mr. Clutch opens the case carefully. Inside is a rare looking performance part.
Original and imported, took me six months to track it down.
Paulie nods, impressed.
PAULIE
This thing better wake the car up.
MR. CLUTCH
walks away
Paulie smiles.
Duration about 20 seconds.
PAULIE’S DRIVEWAY – NIGHT
Paulie tightens the last bolt and closes the hood.
Duration about 5 seconds.
STREET – NIGHT
Paulie drives toward the car meet.
Duration about 10 seconds.
CAR MEET – NIGHT
Paulie pulls in. Jay, leaning on his Car, watches closely before walking over.
JAY
Nice build.
So what are you running?
Paulie steps out calmly.
PAULIE
Enough.
Jay laughs.
JAY
Come on. What’s under the hood?
Paulie smirks.
Duration about 15 seconds.
Paulie leans against his car like a pro.
PAULIE
Custom turbo encubobulator.
Forged mega pistons.
And a fat snail.
Jay stares.
JAY
how?
PAULIE
I got my ways
JAY
Whatever, man. Hope it’s faster than your mouth.
PAULIE
*smirks
Slower then your moms
Jay: Save it for the race
Duration about 20 seconds.
CAR MEET – NIGHT
Paulie and Jay get into their cars. Someone off screen starts counting.
GUY THAT COUNTS RACE DOWN
Three… two… one…Go!
Paulie launches.
The car stalls instantly.
Dead silence.
Paulie grips the wheel, annoyed, not panicked.
PAULIE
Shit, shit, sh-
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Paulie nods, impressed.
PAULIE
This thing better wake the car up.
MR. CLUTCH
walks away
Paulie smiles.
Duration about 20 seconds.
PAULIE’S DRIVEWAY – NIGHT
Paulie tightens the last bolt and closes the hood.
Duration about 5 seconds.
STREET – NIGHT
Paulie drives toward the car meet.
Duration about 10 seconds.
CAR MEET – NIGHT
Paulie pulls in. Jay, leaning on his Car, watches closely before walking over.
JAY
Nice build.
So what are you running?
Paulie steps out calmly.
PAULIE
Enough.
Jay laughs.
JAY
Come on. What’s under the hood?
Paulie smirks.
Duration about 15 seconds.
Paulie leans against his car like a pro.
PAULIE
Custom turbo encubobulator.
Forged mega pistons.
And a fat snail.
Jay stares.
JAY
how?
PAULIE
I got my ways
JAY
Whatever, man. Hope it’s faster than your mouth.
PAULIE
*smirks
Slower then your moms
Jay: Save it for the race
Duration about 20 seconds.
CAR MEET – NIGHT
Paulie and Jay get into their cars. Someone off screen starts counting.
GUY THAT COUNTS RACE DOWN
Three… two… one…Go!
Paulie launches.
The car stalls instantly.
Dead silence.
Paulie grips the wheel, annoyed, not panicked.
PAULIE
Shit, shit, sh-
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